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Log_#3//Case File: Maria - 20/09/2017

PekolaPekola1個月前Diary
This is the part of the story where things begin to get hairy. Just exactly what is a category 5 hurricane?

Well, the only thing I could think of was a race car going at 175mph. Except this car was wind. All around you.

[And now we have a wiki page for Maria]

Worry began to set in. Our house is half wood/ half concrete. My grandma and uncles live in the lower-concrete story and we live at the top.

Due to space concerns (we have six dogs;long story), it was decided that I would stay with my dad at his Wife's apartment. My mom and sister would stay in the lower story of the house with the dogs. I was not pleased with this---I found that apartment oppresive. But it was an emergency and so I cooperated as best I could.

The weather felt like a thousand howls, screams of terror from wind-like creatures that wanted nothing more than to destroy everything in their path. But we were safe. We had tensed and roped and hammered and moved, ect. We were safe, I kept telling myself over and over in that dark apartment.

Never in my life had I felt such strong feeling of dread, having to leave my home and my mom and sister---hoping that when the morning came, we'd be back together as though nothing.

At some point I must have fallen asleep because I remember my eyes going wide open. I glaced over to my dad also wide awake in a sofa next to me. We knew what we had to do.

We got up and made our way to his wife's van, to find that her rear crystal had been smashed. Not good, but we still went on the drive.

Normally, the drive from here to there tends to be a three minute affair with no issues. But today, trees covered the road, fallen from the storm. Electrical lines sustained by huge concrete poles fell as well. It was a grim sight, but we went on.

Just as we turned around the corner to my house, the dread was making my stomach churn and my nerves to go haywire. What would I find?

The first thing I saw was a tree. The tree that had been standing proud for years, was now torn asunder and dropped to the ground, its roots still trying to cling to the earth. Tears started forming around my eyes. It was...sobering. This tree, that had been there for more than 25 years, was now fallen.

I looked to my house and I saw that the four walls were still there. I sighed with relief as we parked and quickly went to look for my mom and sis. They were crying and their faces looked defeated.

We held each other and they mentioned they'd gone inside the house. They saw what we had yet to see and you could tell by their eyes that it was something no one could have prepared us for.

As we made our way through the stairs on this cloudy, yet light weather, I steeled myself. Whatever it was that I would see, I had to be prepared.

But I was not steel. I was mud--a mixture of water and dirt that could not sustain the wrath of nature's marvel.

Before me, all I could remember was my legs losing feeling and the light descending on me---the ceiling was gone

At this point I don't remember much else than thinking this is what the rapture must feel like. The cool air. The light from the sky. I thought I must have seen an angel flying somewhere in there.

It was my rapture, 'cause right then there, I swear I blanked out.
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orochimaruxsaber (1個月前) #27306442idc what these people below me are saying!! I have been following your Maria blogs and I love your writing style so much, it definitely makes the tragedy much more real to me, since I don't live in the affected area and I can't even begin to imagine how the natural disaster has actually affected those living there. I wish the best for you and your family, and I hope you are able to salvage or rebuild your collection in the future <3

Honestly, when I started writing I just wanted to blow off steam out of frustration.

Thanks so much for your comment.
1個月前
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idc what these people below me are saying!! I have been following your Maria blogs and I love your writing style so much, it definitely makes the tragedy much more real to me, since I don't live in the affected area and I can't even begin to imagine how the natural disaster has actually affected those living there. I wish the best for you and your family, and I hope you are able to salvage or rebuild your collection in the future <3
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Pekola (1個月前) #27200598Okay, but this is my experience. You can't decide how I should portray it. Like I said, this Catharsis. A way to vent.
I'm not sure why my reply upset you. I'm just explaining what these entries are, not trying to start an argument.
I'm not upset in the slightest, I'm not trying to argue and I don't care how you write them it's your choice. I'm just pointing out that its confusing.
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Korlax (1個月前) #27200383Ok apparently its time to play my autism card but what? did i write my post wrong or have you read it wrong... have i read it wrong? I'm literally just saying you're tone is off which shouldn't matter regardless of language and if your using it as a log for yourself i just dont understand why you would write it like this just ugh you know what i dont care i should just learn my lesson and not ask questions its too stressful. Bottom line i just find it hard to sympathise with you and your situation when you're writing like that because for lack of a better term it seems fake and forced. which is fine on an entertainment factor but this shouldn't be entertaining if you know what i mean

Okay, but this is my experience. You can't decide how I should portray it. Like I said, this Catharsis. A way to vent.

I'm not sure why my reply upset you. I'm just explaining what these entries are, not trying to start an argument.
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Pekola (1個月前) #27199537It comes off as a bit tone-deaf, if anything. This is a diary entry. It's meant to be a log for myself and for informing/entertaining whoever reads it as a secondary purpose.
English isn't my first language, so my literary skills may not be up to snuff. But that isn't the point of these at all.
I'm talking about losing my job, my house and my belongings in a storm. This is something that actually happened and is still happening. The least of my concerns is how MFC members will perceive my diary entries, should they choose to read them.
It's mainly a personal thing. Catharsis, if you will. The people that read it don't have to like it.
It's a fair concern. No hard feelings :D
Ok apparently its time to play my autism card but what? did i write my post wrong or have you read it wrong... have i read it wrong? I'm literally just saying you're tone is off which shouldn't matter regardless of language and if your using it as a log for yourself i just dont understand why you would write it like this just ugh you know what i dont care i should just learn my lesson and not ask questions its too stressful. Bottom line i just find it hard to sympathise with you and your situation when you're writing like that because for lack of a better term it seems fake and forced. which is fine on an entertainment factor but this shouldn't be entertaining if you know what i mean
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Korlax (1個月前) #27197483I get that but it's still very odd, in basic primary school English we learnt that you use specific language in specific situations depending on the texts audience and intent.
Focusing on intent because audience is iffy but you seem to have gotten it kinda right. This isn't AO3, you are writing about an actual thing that actually happened in your actual life but you've written it in such a way that it seems like fiction (I'd give examples of this but new mfc sucks and I can't look) which takes the reader out of just the sheer gravity of the situation.
There's also a lot of padding in these posts (again can't get examples) that while adding more to the backstory really should be removed because they serve absolutely no purpose to the actual "story" and look to be there solely to drag out these posts as long as possible when really they should just be in one.
This probably comes of as really rude doesn't it


It comes off as a bit tone-deaf, if anything. This is a diary entry. It's meant to be a log for myself and for informing/entertaining whoever reads it as a secondary purpose.

English isn't my first language, so my literary skills may not be up to snuff. But that isn't the point of these at all.

I'm talking about losing my job, my house and my belongings in a storm. This is something that actually happened and is still happening. The least of my concerns is how MFC members will perceive my diary entries, should they choose to read them.

It's mainly a personal thing. Catharsis, if you will. The people that read it don't have to like it.

It's a fair concern. No hard feelings :D
1個月前
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Pekola (1個月前) #27195335For style reasons only. It's harder to be too literal because it wasn't a fun experience. I get that but it's still very odd, in basic primary school English we learnt that you use specific language in specific situations depending on the texts audience and intent.

Focusing on intent because audience is iffy but you seem to have gotten it kinda right. This isn't AO3, you are writing about an actual thing that actually happened in your actual life but you've written it in such a way that it seems like fiction (I'd give examples of this but new mfc sucks and I can't look) which takes the reader out of just the sheer gravity of the situation.

There's also a lot of padding in these posts (again can't get examples) that while adding more to the backstory really should be removed because they serve absolutely no purpose to the actual "story" and look to be there solely to drag out these posts as long as possible when really they should just be in one.

This probably comes of as really rude doesn't it
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Korlax (1個月前) #27167281This is going to bother me if I don't ask but why have you written the post like this?

For style reasons only. It's harder to be too literal because it wasn't a fun experience.
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I like your writing style :)
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Korlax (1個月前) #27167281This is going to bother me if I don't ask but why have you written the post like this?
Seems this person having interest making these Log_#/Case File posts. It the third one they wrote within the last three days. I also notice the last 4 post they wrote is all weather related. But yes I do agree with your comment.
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